i wouldn't lie!! i promise it really isn't as bad as you think. i just picked apart the grammar mostly; your spelling was on point. :) and when you learn another language, there will always be mistakes.

i truly think this was great for an esl fic and i don't think you should worry about it so much. punctuation and clause breaks seem to be the only thing you really struggle with, and those are easy to fix!

i wish you all the luck and i hope it helped. <3 try to find a good english speaking friend of yours and ask them to beta stuff you write. the more your mistakes get pointed out, the quicker you'll learn to fix them, because you'll remember the last time you made that mistake! it's the easiest and quickest way to fix your grammar. :)