well she develops them super qt at first but they jump into a relationship too fast after some love/hate back-and-forth and idk she just doesn't sell the relationship well. also they've hardly started a rlship and already pcy thinks he's in love. the pacing of their relationship is too off for me, this was the prob i had with their previous fic as well
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